0028888: Your Character Made A Bad Prediction text change

ID	Project	Category		Date Submitted	Last Update

0028888	Heart Of The Machine	Suggestion		Jun 19, 2024 1:19 pm	Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm

Reporter	ptarth	Assigned To	Chris_McElligottPark
Status	resolved	Resolution	fixed
Product Version	0.549 Of Mice And Crowns
Fixed in Version	0.553 Fenceline

Summary	0028888: Your Character Made A Bad Prediction text change
Description	The "Your Character Made A Bad Prediction" text might be changed. 1. The text swaps between 'the character' and 'your character'. I believe 'your character' would be preferred. 2. The flow of the text is a little jumpy, I propose a smoother version below. Original: In the case of the nano-seed, the character talked about how humans were making too big a deal out of how dangerous nanotech was. Then right after the accident the character thinks 'Okay, maybe the humans were right. Alternative. In the case of the nano-seed, your character was arrogant and wrong. They talked about how humans were making too big a deal out of how dangerous nanotech was. They tried to create a bunker, which then failed in a spectacular manner. Afterward the character thinks 'Okay, maybe the humans were right'. However, they haven't changed their ways and will continue to be rather dismissive of human abilities.
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Date Modified	Username	Field	Change
Jun 19, 2024 1:19 pm	ptarth	New Issue
Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm	Chris_McElligottPark	Assigned To	=> Chris_McElligottPark
Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm	Chris_McElligottPark	Status	new => resolved
Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm	Chris_McElligottPark	Resolution	open => fixed
Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm	Chris_McElligottPark	Fixed in Version	=> 0.553 Fenceline
Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm	Chris_McElligottPark	Note Added: 0069360

Chris_McElligottPark Jun 20, 2024 8:38 pm administrator ~0069360	Thanks! * The unreliable narrator text has been tuned a bit to be even more clear and consistent.